Creationist of the Bats
Once upon a time there was a god of the kindom of the sky that his porpuse was to create aanimal that fly and that has to be a mammal, has to have teeth, it has to ate fruit, it has to be acrobatic to fly. The god is named Ben, Ben love animals with wings. Ben starts creating the animal, so he thing that was perfect that that the animal has to be small, Ben talks with the others gods about his idea, the god tell him that was a bad idea because that animal can be so dangerous it can kill somebody, Ben tel them that he is going to make that anomal inoffensive that is not going to ate humans. The other gods aas very furious because that animal can be so ofull, the others gods tolld him that what will happen if that animal evolutionist, Ben told them that the animal is no going to evolutionst.Ben was so happy because of his creation ,that was the only that Ben create. Ben starts creating his animal, he dont know how it is going to be it name. Ben consult every god of the kindom of the sky, to create the name of that animal, so he starts aking to the gods, someone told him it can be the "carnivors", others told him the "black bird", others told him the "animal of the death", Been think about the names, he think, think and think, everybody said "why did he think a lot", Ben think a lot because was his first creation, Ben dont know how to put to the animal he was so sad. Sara who was the best fried of Ben, went to the house of Ben and starts helping him to created the animal, Ben was so happy to looked Sara.Ben said to Sara that is wrong to create something in pears, because when one god create something she or he would won a super special give, that give would be from the gods of the Olympus, the give is that you can go to the Olympus and stay there as a other god more strong that the ones that be in that kindom of the sky, Sara remember that she was so sad but she do a promise with Ben. The promise was that she is going to help him but any god can knowed that she is going to help him. Sara only want the best for Ben, because she remember that Ben save her live in a competence,Sara was running in a race but she goes down, she has a terrible accident, she broke her neck, she was first, so the others gods who go back are going to run over her so Ben enter and kept her outside the race,Ben was so happy because Sara was good.
Ben called Sara to acme to his house to think about the name of the animal, Sar goes and think why not to put bats to the animal,Ben first doesnt likethe name but Sara explain him why, because bats is like animals of the nigth, animals that are samlls and that had wings,Ben was no confortable but is the best name that he listened in all the day.
Ben and Sara starts creating it, they imagine something with wings and has to be small how Ben like, so Sara think that it can be with eye-tooth and with ears smalls and with a shape of triangle, Ben think that aws good, so he start creating it with a lot of imagination and help of Sara.
Ben and Sara create the body without wings and the head, they create the legs only but Ben think that was good idea to do the wings big for do that the bat fly more time, Sara think that also was a good idea to do the head small for do that the head doesnt were so heavy, Ben think in his mind that Sara was so intelligent and Sara think also the same, tha two were very happy about that creation that were very fantastic.
Ben think that they can include hair in all it body, Sara said that it is not a bad idea. Sara and Ben was so happy, they finish the bat. Ben present the bat to the gods of the Olympus, he so nervous. The gods of the Olympus said that is a fantastic creation,the gods said to him that he can enter to the Olympus, Ben jump because he was so happy, the gods give the life for the bat and the bat go away. Ben was so happy but sad also because he goes away of Sara, Sara said to Ben that was a good friend, Ben said to Sara goodbye and Sara the same and Ben go for EVER.
Hi Villa,The story is so good but it have in some cases incoerence and problems of grammar but of the rest is well
ResponderEliminarHello villa Your story is good but need to check spelling =)
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